培培妈妈2005 发表于 2013-6-25 21:20:04

两年级儿子第一次写的英语文章,求指导

Today is a happy day. I with grandma and grandpa go to Oriental land. First we bought three ticket in the ticket offce, and rental a bicycle in the bicycle rental and I let grandpa to ride with me and grandma sit in the middle.we ride aroud the Maidenhiar tree road north and I finde fun bridge and I sad to grandma:\"Can we stop?\"grandma said:Yes you can, but we can\'t stay lang.\"So, I push the brake, and we got of the bicycle and walk to one of the fun bridge.I go first, it is very easy to cross it, and grandpa come, at last, grandma come. and we went to peer bridge, but I can\'t stand, I must crawl.And we go to the cutting bridge, I can\'t crawl on these bridge so I muster up courage and stand on the bridge.Because cross these bridge is easy, I use two minutes to cross these bridge and I walk on steel bridge. whan I across it, grandma said to me:\"We must go now, because we only have two hours, and we must ride back to one door to return it!\" So we got on the bicycle.when we ride a l a bit of road, I finde hero\'s road and I walk in the first road.The first road is very small, so I bent over the small road. when I parst the small road, a big mountain appear in frout of me, I climb the mountain, I think I had climb three mountains to the end.

涵妈咪2010 发表于 2013-6-25 21:39:40

{:soso_e179:}

azesunyu 发表于 2013-6-25 22:19:53

超级棒,我儿子要是到时候也能达到这个水准就好了

redforestsea 发表于 2013-6-26 10:46:21

牛妈妈 厉害

培培妈妈2005 发表于 2013-6-26 21:27:15

大家一定没仔细看,语法、时态问题多多!
写的方式中国式思维!
自己水平有限,期待高手指点,怎样帮助孩子提高!

Elizabeth 发表于 2013-6-28 15:36:33

文章第一要正确使用标点,正确分段。这文章没有分段,就是随手写的,没有训练过。

培培妈妈2005 发表于 2013-6-30 08:57:04

Elizabeth 发表于 2013-6-28 15:36 static/image/common/back.gif
文章第一要正确使用标点,正确分段。这文章没有分段,就是随手写的,没有训练过。

对!确实是随手写的!第一次随手写!有很多不足,希望多多指导!

开心大果果 发表于 2014-11-26 10:51:36

二年级的孩子能写成这样,真是超级的好了,楼主是怎么培养的孩子呢。学习
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