英文写作方法分享 - Storyboard
本帖最后由 碧云金毛 于 2013-3-1 10:29 编辑一直觉得Max的写作是他的弱项（中英文都是）。上学期期末中文老师叮嘱我们一定要加强写作，否则过一段时间就跟不上了。假期里买来了中文的《跟名师学写作》，可试了试实在不知道除了读范文外怎么跟名师学，所以写作这事儿就搁浅了。
昨天是学校的展示日，就是请家长到学校由小朋友自己介绍这半个学期的学习成果，有美术的，数学的，还有英文的。看到他的两篇作文，觉得这个写作还真的在进步。仔细想一想，实在不是娃牛，而是老师教得好，教的得道，教的有水平。特意拿上来跟大家分享其中的一个方法 - storyboard：
怕大家看着累，把Max写的原封不动的按顺序抄在下面。
Once there was a hero called Serus who lived in a big Kingdom;
A monster will eat four men and women each month and tomorrow he is going to eat them!
Serus asked someone where does Certheado the monster live;
He can’t fly up into the sky, then a godess called Athena appeared and gave him a magic pot to take power away and a glimmering shield;
The godess called Athena made a cloud and Serus jumped on the cloud and flew into the sky then he meets the monster;
The monster attacked but he block it with the shield then took the pot out and sucked the monster’s powers!
Everyone was so glad that the monster loose the powers and Serus was King!
Fierce glimmering golden scary strong powerful blue red freezing big wooden roars hot bravely calmly silently
方法的话，我想不用我解释，大家跟着图看一定看得懂，无非就是引导，提示等。
看过加州教材的writing还有starfall里面的关于writing，从给句子填空开始，从写一个句子再到根据提示写几个句子，几个小句子就是一个story，还可以随意把句子中的主谓宾词语换成不同的词，又组成不同的句子不同的故事，让小孩子是积极主动的要去写。
再看我们汉语的看图写话，太抽象了，还必须符合老师的意愿，唉。 进来学习取经. 本帖最后由 碧云金毛 于 2013-3-1 10:33 编辑
这是他去年写的一篇作文，我只修改了一处并加两处注解（他把sub teacher搞成supply teacher了）。老师的修改和批注都在附件里，这里没包括在内。
Monday 8th October 2012
LO: To write a story using my character descriptions
It was a hot summer day and I’m ready for another fantastic day. I walked into class slowly. I waited and waited but there is no sign of Mr. P (班主任). Suddenly I heard Mr. S(校长) walked in with a man. Mr. S introduced the man, he was our supply (substitute) teacher and his name was Mr. Wavy.
He was a very sporty teacher because when he came in and introduced himself he changed into his rugby shirt with his blue shiny watch and took us straight down to PE （体育课）.
He was like a mathematician in math, he almost know every single question. In science he know where the caveman came from and he (was) as smart as a computer.
It was almost the end of the fantastic day because it is golden time, we got 45 minutes of golden time because we were so good at lining up at break. At lunch time, I played Lego with Thor but suddenly I notice something wrong. Where is Mr. Wavy? Then I saw Mr. P and ran torward to ask where he was. He told me that he went home and asked me to pack up because its home time.
I walked home still wondering where Mr. Wavy is. It is a very fun and tired day so when I got home I took of my bag and slowly fell asleep on the soft sofa. I dreamed what all the wonderful things that happened in school.
来学习了，非常感谢。 这个真正高呀！{:soso_e179:} 上海悄悄 发表于 2013-3-1 08:07 static/image/common/back.gif
这个真正高呀！
班上中游水平。 我们还没开始那！{:soso_e110:} 谢谢分享。我们没有这种Storyboard, 我想到的是用绘本让孩子自己拓展写。 本帖最后由 洋洋妈 于 2013-3-1 08:54 编辑
图画画得很棒耶，写得也很好。 gocrack 发表于 2013-3-1 08:47 static/image/common/back.gif
谢谢分享。我们没有这种Storyboard, 我想到的是用绘本让孩子自己拓展写。
gocrack，请问你孩子进行拼读的时候用的什么书？我追到这里来了都{:soso_e106:} 方法可以借鉴，有点像连环画哈。 mark，，，谢谢分享 这方法真不错啊。感谢分享。有这样老师真是孩子们福气啊。 很好，学习了！！！ 佩服啊，孩子多大了？平时引导孩子讲故事就是经常问问题，可是没这么系统，以后要跟着绘本引导了 学习，这种写作文的方法真好，有了提示知道怎么展开了。 楼主，是否有如图片所示的符合孩子各个年龄段和认知度的激发写作兴趣的练习册？能否提供这方面的信息？谢谢 本帖最后由 碧云金毛 于 2013-3-2 11:03 编辑
yaer2002cn 发表于 2013-3-2 09:43 static/image/common/back.gif
楼主，是否有如图片所示的符合孩子各个年龄段和认知度的激发写作兴趣的练习册？能否提供这方面的信息？谢谢
上海这边的外文书店里有针对各个年龄段专门锻炼写作的书（有一段时间家乐福也有）。其中Brain Quest 有一个系列 Math， Writing， spelling等等。美国的书，按G分段的。
不完全一样，但基本一个意思。
所示图片是学校里老师的教材，貌似从某个教科书上复印下来的。
哇，这个办法很好，我谢谢LZ，语文也可以用得上，就是不知道这资料哪有。 yaer2002cn 发表于 2013-3-2 09:43 static/image/common/back.gif
楼主，是否有如图片所示的符合孩子各个年龄段和认知度的激发写作兴趣的练习册？能否提供这方面的信息？谢谢
重新回复。
其实我觉得书不书的不是重点。
重点是多加引导，使得小朋友在回答问题的时候故事就写好了。引导时无非就是提示5W （when why where。。。。）。
再然后就是多加细节, 比如：
once there was a boy -->
once there was a tall boy-->
once there was a very tall boy-->
once there was a very tall boy with black hair-->
once there was a very tall boy with long black hair-->
。。。。。。等等，等等
碧云金毛于2013-3-2 12:50补充以下内容：
我不是英语教师啊， 但这些都是平时老师要求小朋友的。。。 翩若惊鸿 发表于 2013-3-1 09:39 static/image/common/back.gif
gocrack，请问你孩子进行拼读的时候用的什么书？我追到这里来了都
我找不到啊，所以才追问的，请原谅笨的人吧 孩子的老师是外教吗？ 多谢了，从楼主这里获得过很多经验。 喜欢楼主这种实用的帖,让好帖子再来得猛烈点吧~~哈哈 谢谢楼主的经验分享，很喜欢。孩子写得真棒，画得也可爱哈。 学习了，非常感谢 楼主家的宝贝是在国际学校吗，老师很棒啊，宝贝更棒啊！
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