女儿写的演讲稿，请指点一下
本帖最后由 qing4555 于 2011-4-27 12:40 编辑女儿参加英语比赛，定题演讲的题目是：friendship.这个是事先准备的，这是在考验家长。由于妈妈英语水平菜，不能给她好的指导，上次比赛就是事先准备的环节没准备好，被淘汰了。这次可不敢大意。反而是现场抽取的方式比较自信。所以请各位高手给点意见。应该怎么写才能有新意。对了，我孩子是小高组的。进入了希望英语山东省比赛。请大家帮忙，谢谢。
女儿晚上写了一篇，请大家给指点一下，谢谢。
Friendship
Do you know the answer of the riddle? Build a special kind of ship that rides the waves, both high and low, on every kind of trip. The answer is friendship. Yes, when friends are together nothing will stop them. Like once, we were climbing a mountain, a lot of trouble came, like nearly fall off a rock or can’t go on anymore.
But we sloved all the trouble. We helped and encouraged each other. Finally we got on the top of mountain. The sight from there is great. I think this is the power of friendship. Thank you..
其中的RIDDLE，在magic tree house中的，这是我满意的一点。网上的材料大家都能找到，这可是孩子自己写的。
还有好的再给你
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic: What does friendship mean? You should write at least 120 words and you shouldbase your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1.友谊是人生永恒的主题。
2.友谊到底意味着什么。
3.友谊的重要性。
What does friendship mean? There is no definite answer. An eternal theme in literature, friendship is also indispensable in daily life. Friendship is to our life what salt is to dasher. When you are happy, friendship is just like adding flowers on the brocade; when you are sad, friendship is a dose of consolation; if you are in trouble, friends will surround you and remove the barriers for you; if you have a hard nut to crack, you can turn to friends for help. We admire the great friendship between Marx and Engel, which firmly combined them and pushed them forward on the road to exploring and fulfilling Communism.
Friendship isn't almighty, but no one can live happily without it. 谢谢热心的fionafanfan ，我现在帮孩子积累资料，主要还是让孩子自己写。 http://wenku.baidu.com/view/9eda1ffdc8d376eeaeaa31f5.html
这里有一篇演讲稿可以参考一下 试试这个theme， A friend in need is a friend indeed。评委会喜欢。 孩子晚上写了一篇，请大家看看
Friendship
Do you know the answer of the riddle? Build a special kind of ship that rides the waves, both high and low, on every kind of trip. The answer is friendship. Yes, when friends are together nothing will stop them. Like once, we were climbing a mountain, a lot of trouble came, like nearly fall off a rock or can’t go on anymore.But we sloved all the trouble. We helped and encouraged each other. Finally we got on the top of mountain. The sight from there is great. I think this is the power of friendship. Thank you..
十分感谢绿袖子 老师的指点。 本帖最后由 wangyuou 于 2011-4-27 14:27 编辑
就这么一点点长度就够了吗？
我家参加比赛就把青蛙和蛤蟆大幅删减后背背，居然也进市决赛。
这次准备把温妮女巫的故事大幅删节后背背，看看能不能混进省决赛。O(∩_∩)O哈哈~
如果我家混进去了，那就说明这个比赛也是和和调个。。。。。。。。
我家是低年级组的。并且我家才一年级，要和3年级的比赛
只允许60秒之内，不能超时啊。 本人的英语水平一般，但是这篇稿子有些中式英语的感觉。
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