[希望之星] 让小朋友学习一下小当演讲的英文

本帖最后由 strainless 于 2013-8-5 08:41 编辑

小当的英文真是不错，标准、清晰、流畅，除此之外，声音非常甜美，犹如微风轻轻拂过，又如清泉缓缓流淌...
由于俺的英语各方面水平有限，只能大致听出下面这些来，所以需要大家给予指正，把有错误的序号改正就可以了。

我想把小当这一段作为榜样，让我家小子学学，榜样的力量是无穷的，你懂的...

01、Hello, I am angel, a spoiled child of my mother，sky.

02、I live in a beautiful but deserted garden.

03、One day, I play alone with the clouds,  Rain(? 词汇有限) wet my wings.

04、I fell to the ground, My magic two wings were injured.

05、I felt so lonely and helpless,  I could do nothing but cry.

06、A group children came towards me, they stretched （？） they hands, they smile at me and hold me,

07、They love and kindness like a cool breeze blowing （？）over my face,  ? a clear spring water in my hearts. （这段没听出来）

08、I take off my hard （ ? ）  two wings, and gave people my  source (? soft)  smile,

09、I bring unbrellas to the children who are running in the rain.

10、I light the lamp to the man who is walking in the mountain road updown.

11、I present warmth to the oldly before they are shadow.（这一段没听出来）

12、I use all my magic to spread the seeds of happiness and love, and peaple\'s hearts, and happiest angel at earth（？）.

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salinalee

2013-8-4 23:18:27 使用道具

会是沙发吗？只看到有拼写错误，peaple 应为 people

浩浩妈

2013-8-4 23:21:22 使用道具

这内容你家小子肯读么？我家小子爱好独特，很多方法都不能复制。

ponymom

2013-8-4 23:39:17 使用道具

后边交流部分的英语回答也很好啊

胡土豆

2013-8-5 00:02:45 使用道具

本帖最后由胡土豆于 2013-8-5 00:22 编辑

俺试听了一下，修改部分用黑体字标注，不知对否。还请英语高手或当爸来校正：

06、A group of children came close to me, they stretched their hands, they smile at me and hug me,
07、Their love and kindness like a cool breeze blowing over my face, like a spring pot to my heart.
10、I light the lamp for the man who is walking on the mountain road at dawn.（？）
11、I present warmth to the eldly when they are before shadow

sandydad

2013-8-5 00:29:40 使用道具

本帖最后由 sandydad 于 2013-8-5 00:32 编辑

我也玩一下
01、Hello, I\\\'m an angel, a small child of my mother，sky.

02、I live in a beautiful but deserted garden.

03、One day, I played alone with the clouds,  twirl ? with my wings.

04、and fell to the ground, My magic wings  injured.

05、I felt so lonely and helpless, I could do nothing but cry.

06、A group  of children came close to me, they stretched  their hands, they smiled at me and helped me,

07、The lovely kindness like a cool breeze whirl my face, a  spring pointed to my heart.

08、I take off my hard  wings, and gave people my (first?) smile,

09、I bring umbrellas to the children who are running in the rain.

10、I light the lamp for the man who is walking on  the mountain road at dawn.

11、I present warmth to the elderly ?? before ?? old shadow.

12、I use all my magic to spread the seeds of happiness and love, and people\\\' s hearts, and I am the happiest angel on earth.

炫辰爸爸

2013-8-5 00:50:12 使用道具

Hello, I am an angel; a spoiled child of my mother sky. I live in a beautiful but deserted garden. One day, I played alone with the clouds. Rain wet my wings, and I fell to the ground. My magic wings were injured. I felt so lonely and helpless. I could do nothing but cry. A group of children came close to me. They reached out their hands. They smiled at me and held me. Their love and kindness were like a cool breeze blowing on my face, like spring pouring into my heart. Warmth and love surrounded me. I would like to share this love with all my friends from now on. I take off my hard wings and give people my soft smile. I use all my magic to spread happiness and plant seeds of love in people\'s hearts. I am the happiest angel on Earth.

这个是全国预赛时候的稿子，但当时得到的分不高，临时对稿子做了一些修改，同时放缓语速把时间也延长到90秒左右。

炫辰爸爸

2013-8-5 00:59:15 使用道具

本帖最后由炫辰爸爸于 2013-8-5 01:14 编辑

I bring umbrellas to the children who are running in rain. I light a lamp for the man who is walking on the mountain road at dawn.I present warmth to the elderly where before there was shadow.
这个是修改后增加的一组排比句。

Warmth and love surrounded me. I would like to share this love with all my friends from now on.  这2句去掉了。

让天使到人间后增加了人间的写实部分，是结尾不至于收的很急！稿子是17日下午改好的，比赛是18日下午。可能没有仔细推敲，希望大家指教！
Hello, I am an angel; a spoiled child of my mother sky.
I live in a beautiful but deserted garden.
One day, I played alone with the clouds. Rain wet my wings, and I fell to the ground.
My magic wings were injured. I felt so lonely and helpless.  I could do nothing but cry.
A group of children came close to me. They reached out their hands. They smiled at me and held me.
Their love and kindness were like a cool breeze blowing on my face, like spring pouring into my heart.
I take off my hard wings and give people my soft smile.
I bring umbrellas to the children who are running in rain. I light a lamp for the man who is walking on the mountain road at dawn.I present warmth to the elderly where before there was shadow.
I use all my magic to spread happiness and plant seeds of love in people\'s hearts.
I am the happiest angel on Earth.

sandydad

2013-8-5 01:05:21 使用道具

Hello, I am an angel; a spoiled child of my mother sky. I live in a beautiful but deserted garden. One day, I played alone with the clouds. Rain wet my wings, and I fell to the ground. My magic wings were injured. I felt so lonely and helpless. I could do nothing but cry. A group of children came close to me. They reached out their hands. They smiled at me and held me. Their love and kindness were like a cool breeze blowing on my face, like spring pouring into my heart. I bring umbrellas to the children who are running in rain. I light a lamp for the man who is walking on the mountain road at dawn.I present warmth to the elderly where before there was shadow.
I take off my hard wings and give people my soft smile. I use all my magic to spread happiness and plant seeds of love in people\\\'s hearts. I am the happiest angel on Earth.

谢谢了