儿子的spooky story
本帖最后由 看看妈 于 2010-10-24 10:57 编辑几天前，就听儿子说按照老师的要求他们都写了万圣节的scary story。他写的是一个Egypt的haunted house，问他内容是什么啊，不答。昨天晚上，在误喝掉一杯巧克力牛奶后，小家伙异常兴奋，竟然讲起学校好多的事情，包括朋友们给他讲的鬼故事。最后，突然问我：“我也写了一个要不要听？”从来没有听他讲过故事的妈妈简直是受宠若惊啊，赶紧说好啊好啊。听完之后，当然是大力鼓励他写下来。于是，有个今天的writing。写的过程中，他又自己改了一些内容，也因为写累了，差点去掉了最scary的部分。看过他的其他writing，但听他正儿八经讲故事不论中文英文好像都是第一次（自责啊）。留个纪念。
The Haunted House Once upon a time, a girl with her Mom moved to a spooky house in Egypt. The girl was scared. She wanted to go back home. But her Mom said “Don’t worry. I will watch you any time in the house and we can not go back home because our house is already changed to a swimming pool.” “Okay.”the girl said. One night the girl’s Mom had to work at night until the next day, so the girl turned all the lights off and zip into bed, ready to sleep. After a while, the girl heard something was moving. It was louder, louder and louder. She opened her eyes, there were a dog’s eyes turned green and a black cat with blood red eyes. The girl screamed and tried to run out of the house but the mummy was in the door way. At last, the girl hid herself in the bed. Soon she fell asleep. The next morning, she woke up. She only saw two mummies were coming but she didn’t see her Mom. “Mom!” shouted the girl. Guess what? one of the mummies answered! “Unh? I’m your Mom”. Suddenly, the girl found herself turned into a skull ! The skull dropped to ground and the ground opened. The skull drop forever! 看看的作文写得真好，令人吃惊，这孩子前途不可限量。 写得真好哎 楼主有空说说怎么训练孩子写的吧 这故事太可怕咧．俺虽然看不懂都觉得害怕．．． 写得真不错呀！ 八岁的孩子写出这样的故事，太了不得啊 写的很好啊，整体构思巧妙，情节一个高潮跟着一个高潮，结尾留下悬念，引人入胜。 本帖最后由 yzmt2001 于 2010-10-24 22:51 编辑
好孩子，不错哈，继续努力！
---打酱油路过。。。摆摆鼠标，拿分飘人
看看这两天晚上不敢一个人睡觉了，看来轻易不要编鬼故事哦！这个后果有点。。。。。。。 很棒呀，能把自己的想法表达的很好，真的不错！ 很厉害哦,你们是上英文学校?8岁写出这样的文章,真的是很棒呢 又看到一个牛娃
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