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PET作文试写-1 2014.07.01(已修改)

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要求:1your story must begin with this sentence.

-----I woke up knowing it was the most important day of my life.

正文:

I woke up knowing it was the most important day of my life.       

I got a letter with an owl! The letter is form Hogwarts.  Let me to study  . Today I’ll go there  by train.  I put everything in a bag. I went to the railway station. There are a lot of people like me. I found the train. Mon and dad said, “Good luck” to me .

In the train, I found a seat.I had a little money. But I was hungry. I just bought a chocolate frog. When I was read the card, the frog jumped away. “Oh”, I said, “ I miss my frog!”    

An hour later we reached the Hogwarts.                                                                      

The Game Keeper-Hagrid shouted, “ First year! First year!  This way! This way!”                                    

At last we went to the hall. Wow! so beautiful.Candles were floating in the air. All the first year student were standing on a line and waiting to wear the cap. When I wore it ,it shouted “Gryffindor”  “Yes!” I was in the same team with Harry Potter! It was great! This day was wonderful!                            

                                                                                      

                                          by sally                                             

                                          2014.07.01     
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2014.07.02修改后:

I woke up knowing it was the most important day of my life. I got a letter with an owl! The letter was form Hogwarts. According to the letter, I was allowed to study there. I decided to go there by train. After I put everything in a bag, I went to the railway station with my parents. There were a lot of people like me. Soon I found the train, then Mom and dad said “Good luck” to me.

 

In the train, I found a seat. I had little money but I was hungry. I could only buy a chocolate frog. When I was reading the card, the frog jumped away. “Oh”, I said, “I lost my frog!”

    

An hour later, we reached the Hogwarts.                                                                      

  The game keeper, Hagrid, shouted, “First year! First year! This way! This way!”                                                                                                                At last we arrived at the hall. Wow! So beautiful! Candles were floating in the air. All the first year students were standing in a line and waiting to wear the cap. When I was wearing it, it showed “Gryffindor”. “Yes!” I was in the same team with Harry Potter! It was great! This day was wonderful!                       




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  • hidden sandydad

    2014-7-1 20:44

    不错, 有些字可能不小心打错了, found a seat,  When I read the card, candles were floating in the air, when I wore it, it shouted..
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  • hidden HELEN

    2014-7-1 21:20

    sandydad: 不错, 有些字可能不小心打错了, found a seat,  When I read the card, candles were floating in the air, when I wore it, it shouted..
    谢谢,我再改改。
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  • hidden violin

    2014-7-24 13:40

    写的真好!
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  • hidden HELEN

    2014-7-24 21:23

    violin: 写的真好!
    谢谢!
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  • hidden andygeng

    2016-3-28 12:56

    写的真好!
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  • hidden 家齐

    2017-4-14 17:45

      
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  • hidden Giant

    2019-12-1 21:07

    很棒
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