[其他] 我们的中英文写作分享小组

刚刚看到这个中英文写作小组。不知道给我女儿报名现在参加还可以吗?我女儿今年9岁，小学四年级，英语有初步的听说读写能力，坚持写英语日记快一年了，虽然断断续续学过一些语法，但是动词时态、介词、主谓一致等有时还是会写错。中文写作因为是母语，写的要好一些。但是写作文在遣词用句、思想深度、文章结构还是差很多。如果还可以参加，我让女儿写一篇自我介绍上来。这是很好的贴子和想法，写作是大多数小学生的弱项，古人说：多读、多思、多写，乃文章之道也。我一直鼓励孩子多写，不管写的好与差，只要坚持就有进步。谢谢楼主开这个贴子。

感谢Mary爸爸的支持，我也有看到Mary回答猫妈论坛问题写的小文章，有一定的英语水平了，也是个有思想、很认真的孩子。不过我们这次小组的活动已经进行一半了（10个topic已写了5个），我也需要询问组里每个小朋友和家长的意见。所以这次非常欢迎Mary来阅读点评，下次再正式加入好吗？

sun
brillant  magnificent
rising  setting shining
gold  star  silver light
ascending  decending  changing
beautiful   peaceful
moon

你的詩寫了很好用詞用的很好!

本帖最后由 yy'mom 于 2013-9-19 20:14 编辑


你的字寫的很好讓我近視眼都能看了清清楚楚!

本帖最后由 培培妈妈2005 于 2013-9-21 20:44 编辑

看了小朋友们的七行诗，都有尽力用生动的形容词和动词去描述主题名词，特别是以前没接触过这种诗的小朋友也有努力去想、去写。谢谢大家的努力。
还没有看到Max的诗，估计这周Max可能会有比较重要的事情或特别忙，没关系，等忙完了，再补上来就好，很期望读到你的小诗。

本帖最后由 洋洋妈 于 2013-9-21 06:18 编辑

这周轮到杨杨为大家提出中文的写作要求了。

杨杨想请大家写一下，你心里梦想去的一个地方，你为什么很想去那里，你到了那里想做什么等等。
所以题目就是 我想去------------- （北京、巴黎、罗马、埃及金字塔、南极、珠穆朗玛峰、非洲大草原等等任何你想去的地方都行，甚至火星、月球，但必须是真实存在的，不能是童话中的地方。）

这个题目要求可高可低，家长根据自家孩子的实际情况灵活掌握就行，比如画画好的小朋友可以将题目画出来，家长帮助打字“我想去xx，因为那里有xx, 我要做xx”就行。要求高的可以比较详细地描述一下想去的地方的风土人情，列一个旅行计划等等。期望看到大家的文章。

对不起大家，这几天一直在九华山，刚刚到家，马山把作业补上：

很好的一个活动哦，我先旁听学习着。

这个想法很好，回家和女儿建议一下，

本帖最后由 洋洋妈 于 2013-9-26 07:08 编辑

这次的文章要求可能对孩子们来说，有点难了，杨杨在写作中比较吃力。基本上是用英语google了解的信息，并完成了文章，然后是翻译成中文。这个翻译过程中，很多专有名称和用词都是我告诉他中文应该如何说的。所以这次的文章，不能算是杨杨的中文写作，顶多是在我帮助下的英译汉的练习。但我觉得就算是翻译过程，也学习了很多中文词汇和表达方式，也算是收获。

我想去巴黎

今年我在学校学了点法语，了解了更多法国的文化，我很想去法国的首都巴黎游玩。因为那是一座历史名城，艺术圣殿和美食天堂。
到了巴黎，我要先去埃菲尔铁塔（Eiffel Tower），坐电梯直达顶层，站在巴黎最高处俯瞰全城迷人的风景。

然后我要去卢浮宫博物馆(Paris Louvre Museum)参观。
这里有三大镇馆之宝---达芬奇画的蒙娜丽莎、  断臂维纳斯雕像 以及胜利女神石像。
           

我还想看看法国皇帝住的宫殿--凡尔赛宫（Palace of Versailles），看看以前法国皇帝的生活是什么样子的。

晚上我要到红磨坊(Moulin Rouge) 看精彩的歌舞表演和品尝美味的法国大餐，然后坐游船游览塞纳河，从水中欣赏巴黎这座美丽的城市。

孩子们真棒。读了孩子们的英文短片，朗朗上口，真喜欢。

我最想去的地方是西班牙的巴塞罗那，因为在那里可以去现场观看梅西和他的巴塞罗那足球队比赛和练习，也可以在那里买到一套真正的巴塞罗那的球衣。我还想去那里参加巴塞罗那俱乐部的夏令营。如果我足够幸运的话，我还有可能拿到梅西的签名！

Max自己打的字啊！

你们去过大海吗？我去过大海边，但是我最想去大海里。
在大海里，我想看到大海浅水区里，水母用上面像盘子一样的东西，一伸一缩优美的在大海里游，看到海豚用它的鳍快速的游泳，有时用尾巴用力一摆跳出水面，让人感到快乐，海龟用它的四肢桨一样的脚，悠闲地划着，慢吞吞的游泳……
在大海里，我想看到有点深的水区里，成百上千的沙丁鱼群，会改变队形。鲨鱼在产像钱包一样的鲨鱼卵……
在大海里，我想看到海底里，小丑鱼在海葵里游来游去，乌贼在喷出墨汁，海星在海底漫步，海参在海底蠕动……
我真的好想去大海里，希望那一天我能实现我的愿望。

本帖最后由 培培妈妈2005 于 2013-9-28 19:28 编辑

my dream
1)you can write sth about your friends
2)you can discuss your dream with your family members?
3)it can be a good dream
4)it can also be a nightmare
(这就是这周bob希望大家喜欢的作文题目！)

对是梦！！

抱歉这次国庆前忙得没时间发迟了
我想去宇宙

我想坐火箭去浩瀚的宇宙，近距离观察璀璨的星星。首先，我最想去看的是那座最漂亮的行星-海王星，我在书里一看见它美轮美奂的图片，就喜欢上它了，经常做梦想去看看它，这次我一定要仔细瞧瞧它的庐山真面目。

如果有机会的话，我还要飞出太阳系，来到银河系的另一个角落，寻找生命，如果能发现外星生命的话，我可一定要拜访他们，让他们成为人类的朋友。如果能发现一个类似地球样的星球，那可就太幸运了，我一定呆在那度假。
我太想去宇宙了，总有一天我要去探索宇宙那无穷无尽的奥秘！

本帖最后由 洋洋妈 于 2013-10-5 04:22 编辑

杨杨的作文 --- A wonderful dream of hunger game


In my dream I won the Minecraft hunger game for the 100th time!

When I joined the game, I got 2 minutes of invincibility (a function that no one can hurt you) to prepare my weapons for the battle. I rushed off to the nearest tree. When I got there, I punched down the tree with my fist because I didn’t have any materials when I just started.

Then I sped to the crafting space to make a wooden pickaxe and went mining for stones.  Before invincibility ran out, I just dug enough stones to craft my stone sword for protecting myself from strong opponents.

When I got out of my hole, a player charged to me swinging his sword wildly. I didn’t fear him. I quickly got out of his way, did a back flip and stabbed him in the back with my stone sword. When I walked on with caution, I found a ravine full of irons.  So I decided to get some iron for my shiny silver armour of protection and an iron sword which could do more damage than my stone sword.

After some time of mining, I finally got full shiny silver armour and a sharp iron sword. I got some cobblestone to help me tower out of the ravine and by that time only 2 other people were left. I used my compass to show me where the other people were. As fast as lightening I sprinted to where they were. I found a person. He had only a brown plain wood sword. He didn’t see me coming, so I quickly jumped out and threw my sword at him.  Before he knew it, he was dead. Now there was only one opponent left. He was a Japanese warrior with a plain wooden sword.  As he didn’t see any chance to win me, he said “I would rather suicide than be killed by you.” With the words, he quickly dumped down some burning red lava and jumped into it. I finally became the one who laughed last and best.


What a wonderful game and what a wonderful dream!

杨杨是写他做梦赢得了Minecraft Hunger game (根据同名畅销书设计的一个网络游戏），估计不知道这个游戏或书的人，可能不太好懂他写的是什么，简单来说，就是制造好的武器装备，打败所有其他玩家，成为最后胜利者。

弱弱的问一下，我们能参加吗?我们虽然和洋洋年龄差不多大，但是感觉不管是中文还是英文都差好远，跟着一起起哄一下，行吗？

本帖最后由 培培妈妈2005 于 2013-10-4 20:12 编辑

my nightmare

  Last night I dreamed about mummies.

  The mummy was very frightful, in the dream the mummies was every were.They were running towards me and opened ther mouth. I was runed away just in time, but they still get closer and closer to me. I was shouted and woked up.

  What a bad nightmare.


                                                                                            by bob

正值国庆假期，可能有的家长带孩子出去玩了或有什么活动，等玩完回来，再把文章发上来就好了。

这周是由Max给我们出中文的写作题目了，总共还有三周，我们这次的写作小组活动就要结束了，感谢大家一直以来的努力，让我们坚持到底哈。

对不起， 是不是又晚了？这是上周的作业：

It’s hard to remember what my dreams were but luckily I wrote one of them on my diary. It was like this:

One day I was chatting during lunch time with Mr. Perry who was my home room teacher last year. We were debating which Chinese Premier League team could beat Chelsea (even that it seems impossible but still anything could happen in a dream). Suddenly a little boy came crying to the teacher on duty. The teacher asked the little boy “why are you crying little boy?’’  The boy pointed to a naughty looking little girl with curly hair and cried “the girl touched my spaghetti!’’ Then the teacher said to the little girl furiously “DON’T TOUCH HIS SPAGHETTI, YOU WILL PASS THE GERMS ON YOUR HAND TO THE FOOD!’’

So that’s how the dream ended and I don’t know what it meant. All I know is I miss Mr. Perry and football is my favorite sport. Oh, by the way, I think curly hair is okay.

明天出中文作业。

本帖最后由 yy\'mom 于 2013-10-6 12:00 编辑

                   The dream

   You must know the twins Jing and Ming the opposite sisters.
Yesterday I truely dreamed them. It was a interesting dream.

   One day afternoon, Jing and Ming had a school camp.
They went to a camp gear. They picked up their clothes, toothbrush,
tent, sleeping bag and Pajamas. They also took some foods, water,
and laterns too. When they went to a beautiful mountain, they
both stopped and gazed to these amazing nature.

   Soon the dinner time came. They quickly made the camp and built the fire.
They yanked the chairs and sat on them.  
They wear the parka when the wind became strong.
Then they started to eat their splendid feast.
When they were full, they went to tent for sleeping.

  They even dreamed they were standing under a big willow tree.
They saw a pretty swan and a blue boat. So they jump down into
the boat as fast as they could be. They yelled and shouted.
They  row the boat to catch the swan.
Suddenly the swan turn to a enormous creature with a tail that was twitching.
Jing and Ming was been scared.   They ran and ran but they didn\'t have anyway to get out.
Last, they woke up.

  \"What a strange dream was!\" they yelled.

不错的活动,等我们有基础了也加入~~~

刚才跑步的时候，跟Max讨论了一下这周的中文作文题目，他的想法是大家就写写我们害怕或曾经害怕过的东西以及为什么。比如说飞虫，黑暗，僵尸，怪兽等等。题目是不是可以叫做“令我害怕”。

本帖最后由 洋洋妈 于 2013-10-6 14:56 编辑

本帖最后由 洋洋妈 于 2013-10-6 15:22 编辑

对了，这个版块有猫妈的写作论坛，有给孩子们出各种类型的写作题目，还帮助做修改，是非常好的写作练习！

非常感謝！其實我試找過，但是就是找不出來。非常感謝。