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本帖最后由 qiankun3 于 2017-1-10 11:16 编辑

     
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  • miaowmom

    2013-9-30 14:52:06 使用道具

    Today, when I woke up ,my mum told me to hurry up and she also told me about the poetry reciting competition.
        I quickly got out of bed (quickly) to brushed my teeth,and went to school to make (up)  my face. When I finished my turn,I went outside and got ready.
       When the competition had started,we went up to the stage,the coach wanted us to dance when we spoke.
    When the competition started,we went up to the stage. The coach wanted us to dance when we spoke.
         And when the show was over,one of my friends let us to curtsey after we finished.
    one of my friend會不會好點LU爸?

    希望你別介意啊。
  • 米莱523

    2013-9-30 14:58:05 使用道具

    to brushed my teeth, 应该是笔误。

    “went to school to make my face\"  to make up/to put on makeup

    “When the competition had started” had要去掉。

    \'\'let us to curtesy\" let us curtesy.

    瑕不掩瑜,对六岁多的孩子来说很棒了。
  • huachun

    2013-9-30 15:02:01 使用道具

    写得真好啊!
  • 学史鉴今

    2013-9-30 15:32:50 使用道具

    嗯,学习了,写得不错
  • woshiyun

    2013-9-30 17:42:43 使用道具

    这个时候没有必要去追究错误,保持好的写作习惯,等她大些修正。比如某位同志说,希望别介意啊。少宾语,应该是我希望你不要介意我对文章的修改。呵呵。
  • Giant

    2020-11-29 12:34:52 使用道具

    真好