前一段时间看到乐言小朋友的大作，非常佩服，特地叫女儿过来好好看看学习学习，她嘴上还不服输。我说你也写点让我看看啊（以前经常口述，很少写）。后来一次她在长途车上用我的手机打了一大段，发来请大家指正一下。不知道是仿写的哪本书，我看了一下觉得干巴巴的，没有乐言小朋友写的生动。（她不太懂标点用法，请忽略）
Amber Chase and the lost campers
1 Amber
It was a peaceful morning at Walt Spring Middle School, Amber Chase was in study Hall,
she can never get good grades, she is a more active girl. Study hall is over, Amber, please follow me. Said Mr Richer. Mr Richer is the math teacher in this school, but he is also in charge of study hall. Amber always get called to Mr Richer's office. Amber like Mr Richer a lot. He seems so nice. Amber followed Mr Richer to his office. Amber, there is something I want to tell you, said Mr Richer.
Go ahead, I'm not stopping you, Amber said.
Listen carefully, Mr Richer told Amber, this is not easy to believe but you have to listen first. Just tell me, Mr Richer, I'm on all ears, Amber encouraged. She thought Mr Richer was going to tell her a math problem.( which Mr Richer always do) But this time, it was different. Amber, said Mr Richer seriously, you are a Demigod.
Amber was stunned. She did not know how to respond. She found herself staring at Mr Richer
in complete surprise. I know, this
is hard to understand, but I am sure of it, you are a Demigod. Amber found these words piercing in to her heart. This must be a miss understood, she said. No, it is not, said Mr Richer, your scent is very strong. Wait, you are telling me that I smell? Amber asked. Definitely not, said Mr Richer, you only smell to monsters, not to me, or any one
else. Mr Richer said with a small laugh. Thank goodness that I don't smell, Amber said.
Amber, do you know what does a Demigod mean? Asked Mr Richer. A Demigod is kid of a god, Amber recalled. Correct, but how did you know all these? Asked Mr Richer. I don't know! Said Amber. The truth is that Amber had read this in Greek mythology, she just don't want to let everyone know she is a nerd.
Well, that is some news Amber, you actually know things. Said Mr Richer. Ha, ha! Very funny, Nr Richer. Said Amber in exasperation. Now, it is time for you to go to lunch, I will talk to you later. I will take you to Camp Half-Blood, if necessary , it's a camp for Demigods. Said Mr Richer. There are this camp for Demigods? Asked Amber. Yes, now go. Urged Mr Richer, I will see you later.
Amber Chase and the lost campers
2 Fred
Fred was standing in line with Eric waiting for lunch. He was also waiting for his best friend Amber. Where is Amber anyway? Asked Eric. How should I be able to know? Answered Fred. Then, at the corner of his eyes, he saw Amber running toward him and Eric.When she reached them, she said, Guys, I just heard the most amazing things ever! Fred and Eric exchange looks, they have been hiding a huge secret from Amber: Amber, Eric and him are Demigods. Amber looked at them suspiciously. Amber, en, we, what do you mean? Asked Eric. Darn it! Fred thought, Eric had made it plain enough that they were hiding something. He tried himself, it wasn't easy. Em, Amber, that is so, so nice! He said with a fake smile. Fred knows very well that Amber is super smart. Wait, you guys know this all the time, don't you! And you never, ever told me! Never! Shouted Amber.
Look, Amber, we wanted to tell you about it, but Mr Richer wants to tell you himself. Eric tried to calm Amber down. Yeah, said Fred, we wanted to tell you.Amber didn't say anything, but her expression told them they had succeeded. So, Amber, asked Fred, did Mr Richer told you about this Camp? Yes, he did, answered Amber, he said it is a Camp for Demigods. And he will take us there one day. I'd rather be anywhere then here, said Fred halfheartedly. He didn't really mean it. He was starting to like Walt Spring middle school. He was a pretty popular kid here. Almost everyone in seventh grade knows him, the funny guy Fred Wager. If they were really living, Fred was not sure if he wants to or not.
When they finished lunch, he Eric and Amber went out to have recess. Amber had her hair tied back into a low ponytail. Which makes her looks even prettier then usual. So, do you want to go to this Camp Half-Blood? Asked Eric. Well, personally, I actually want to. Answered Amber.
Just at that moment, Fred heard a loud " Ban". Looking at Amber's and Eric's expression told Fred they had heard it too. The sound was coming from the front gate of Walt Spring middle school. Fred saw flames, he saw claws and heard his friends screaming. The next thing he know, he fainted.
The first thing he noticed when he woke up, is that he was in a complete different place. He was on a clean white bed, in a tall room. Then he saw Mr Richer leaning over his bed, watching him carefully. Where am I? He asked Mr Richer.
Mr Richer didn't answer, instead, he said, Fred, welcome to Camp Half-Blood.
Amber Chase and the lost camper
3 Eric
Eric was talking to the Head Counselor of Athena's cabin. She was trying to match Eric to the weapons. Personally, Eric prefer a bow. He was always an expert at archery. But all the bows in the weapons hut were all too light for him. The Head Counselor of Athena's cabin suggest a sword for Eric. But it was just not his style.
How about let's move on to the second row, you may find something suitable for you, said Liz. ( the Head Counselor of Athena's cabin)
