昭昭一千零一夜（14）
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2013.9.21
The racing car
A racing car driver called Sam.
He very likes No.1.
His car was named Sam too.
His racing car was red.
Chapter 1
(Let me think about)
The race
Today is the b
ig racing car race.
Sam's car was very fast.
And he got the best medal.
"Oh, no!" said Sam.
"Here is a revolve track(昭昭说这事旋转轨道), and I can't go that."
Sam said and he closed his eyes and jumped in his car and ran.
"Hurree(高兴地拟声词，不会写，昭妈瞎编的)". Sam made it.
(旁边，昭昭说其实这事假的，Sam自己想的，所以有下文)
Sam's birthday present: a racing car toy and train and train track.
"Look,look!" said Sam's mom.
That is your car.your car can go really fast and faster than your friend Jim.
"Yippee!" the Sam's car is win.
Chapter 2
The racing car place
"Wow, this is a hard track. There are revolve track and hill tracks."
And Sam's car is broken.
"We have to ride around them."
"Ready,get set .go!"
Sam's car is first. Jim's car is the second.
Jim's car has no gas. And Sam's car has no gas too(这个地方，因为是否定句，是不是应该用either).
But Sam saw a gas station.
"Please take some gas for me." said Sam.
"Give you!" said the gaser(昭昭说这是加油员)
And Sam wait and sam won.
The end.
故事有了层次感，昭昭说要有前言，还有第一部分，第二部分。至少分段了，呵呵，但是好多时态还是不分。没有纠正他，慢慢来吧。
The racing car
A racing car driver called Sam.
He very likes No.1.
His car was named Sam too.
His racing car was red.
Chapter 1
(Let me think about)
The race
Today is the b
ig racing car race.
Sam's car was very fast.
And he got the best medal.
"Oh, no!" said Sam.
"Here is a revolve track(昭昭说这事旋转轨道), and I can't go that."
Sam said and he closed his eyes and jumped in his car and ran.
"Hurree(高兴地拟声词，不会写，昭妈瞎编的)". Sam made it.
(旁边，昭昭说其实这事假的，Sam自己想的，所以有下文)
Sam's birthday present: a racing car toy and train and train track.
"Look,look!" said Sam's mom.
That is your car.your car can go really fast and faster than your friend Jim.
"Yippee!" the Sam's car is win.
Chapter 2
The racing car place
"Wow, this is a hard track. There are revolve track and hill tracks."
And Sam's car is broken.
"We have to ride around them."
"Ready,get set .go!"
Sam's car is first. Jim's car is the second.
Jim's car has no gas. And Sam's car has no gas too(这个地方，因为是否定句，是不是应该用either).
But Sam saw a gas station.
"Please take some gas for me." said Sam.
"Give you!" said the gaser(昭昭说这是加油员)
And Sam wait and sam won.
The end.
故事有了层次感，昭昭说要有前言，还有第一部分，第二部分。至少分段了，呵呵，但是好多时态还是不分。没有纠正他，慢慢来吧。
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